Name
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Essay
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Comment on Essay
|
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1.
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Akila
|
10
|
Strong arguments, limited range of references.
Much better expected.
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2.
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Maliha
|
9
|
Extremely poor range of references. Imagine
“Chefs” as example! Essay length fine.
|
3.
|
Farhan Tanveer
|
9
|
James Joyce is too heavy for you. Limited range of
references.
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4.
|
Syed Farhan
|
8
|
Extremely limited reference range. Harry Potter!!!
But almost 2 pages!
|
5.
|
Mehreen
|
12
|
Perfect writing! 2 essays in a row.
|
6.
|
Romana
|
11/12
|
Strong argument in simple language.
|
7.
|
Anika H.
|
10
|
“Luck plays huge role in life”!!! Unimpressive
argument. No reading item example. Otherwise good flow of sentences.
|
8.
|
Akif
|
8
|
Too many small paragraphs. Example of Einstein is
too childish. Weak argument development.
|
9.
|
Akil
|
08
|
“Once I watched a movie called …” is a poor start
for an example. Better is – In the movie called “Blow” we see how … No
reading item example.
|
10.
|
Rakin
|
07
|
This time you wrote about being ‘judgmental’ and
‘courageous’. Clearly off-topic. But still you wrote more than one page – so
you get mark.
|
11.
|
Akib
|
11
|
Mixture of sports and personal anecdote, one
reading item. A bit weak in argument development. More reading item reference
can do the magic.
|
12.
|
Durdana
|
10/11
|
Problem with graphology of the essay. A little
weak in argumentation.
|
13.
|
Abanti
|
10
|
Too DARK pencil!!!
|
14.
|
Lamia
|
7
|
Volume not enough – reference to Tagore forbidden.
Refer to no 15 above.
|
15.
|
Sarah
|
11
|
Strong issues with volume still persist.
|
16.
|
Prianka
|
11
|
I am not VERY convinced about the strength of the
essay because there are forced connections between references and arguments.
|
17.
|
Rinat
|
10
|
Writing about Shakespeare must be supported by a
sound idea of his biography. Spell “Playwright” not “play writer”. You could
have used so many good examples from reading items. Refer to no 15 above.
|
18.
|
Saif
|
10
|
“Death of a Salesman” is NOT a novel. STOP giving
further examples of
Abraham Lincoln.
Refer to no 15 above.
|
19.
|
Mehruba
|
7
|
Your essays are getting better. Now try to
increase your volume of writing.
|
20.
|
Sukanya
|
7
|
Volume problem. Refer to no 15
above
|
21.
|
Shanzat
|
7
|
Lack of volume – lack of examples.
|
22.
|
Zami
|
8
|
Do you really think that you have argued the
topic? Refer to no 15 above – there are so many examples you could borrow
from reading items.
|
23.
|
Riasat
|
6
|
Two different graded pencils used. No examples
from your reading items.
|
24.
|
Asif
|
10
|
Never spell “play writer” – it is “playwright”. Refer to no 15 above.
However, Huck Finn example is OK.
|
25.
|
Sadia Majid
|
9
|
Not very happy about large handwriting, wrong
titling of Portrait of an Artist as a
Young Man. Argument there – but where are examples?
|
26.
|
Sadia Jeny
|
9
|
Not strong examples.
|
1.
|
Name
|
Essay
|
Comment on Essay
|
2.
|
Maliha
|
12
|
Pencil too light
|
3.
|
Sadia Majid
|
11/12
|
Better examples
advised
|
4.
|
Farhan
|
8
|
Not full 2 pages
|
5.
|
Lamia
|
10
|
Only example [not
very relevant] is Merchant of Venice – WHY?
|
6.
|
Mehreen
|
12
|
|
7.
|
Romana
|
11/12
|
|
8.
|
Anika H.
|
10
|
Merchant of
Venice–mismatch
|
9.
|
Zami
|
00
|
Not submitted
|
10.
|
Prianka
|
11
|
Can do better
|
11.
|
Abanti
|
12
|
Too dark pencil
|
12.
|
Akif
|
8
|
Not full 2 pages
|
13.
|
Akil
|
07
|
Less than 1½ pg.
|
14.
|
Saif
|
10
|
Finer examples
expected – avoid too many superlative adjectives about historical figures
|
15.
|
Protik
|
12
[A Man for all Seasons]
|
|
16.
|
Rakin
|
06
|
Less than a page
|
17.
|
Riasat
|
00
|
Not submitted
|
18.
|
Akib
|
10
|
Shorter than
expected
|
19.
|
Shafkat
|
00
|
Exempted
|
20.
|
Tahsina
|
00
|
Not submitted
|
21.
|
Mehruba
|
Exempted
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